source: http://www.cisco.com/en/US/hmpgs/index.html target: http://www.cisco.com/web/KR/index.html It sounds awkward due to the non-agreeable subject and modifier. It literally means that “UCS Server” itself became smart to assist with virtualization. It was supposed to read “UCS server to be systematically efficient for virtualization.”
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Microsoft 마이크로소프트 inconsistent wordings
source: http://www.microsoft.com/en-us/ target: http://www.microsoft.com/ko-kr/ “limited-time offer” is translated into “special suggestion.” The verb “get” delivers a literal meaning which sounds awkward in context. Sounds like ‘someone getting a freebie from a lenient donator.’ The verb ending “find out…” in the third image reads a casual form and is not consistent with the other two verbs.
Apple 애플 02 image
source: http://www.apple.com/ipad/ target: http://www.apple.com/kr/ipad/ “for everyone on your list” is nicely rephrased with “for those who I would like to thank and show my love” However, “전하다(show/deliver)” is unnecessarily repeated and makes the flowing unnatural. The second sentence tone doesn’t get along with the preceding sentence due to the verb tone transition. 무료로 배송해 드립니다 …
Apple 애플 01 footer
source: http://www.apple.com/ipad/ target: http://www.apple.com/kr/ipad/ The footer title “about” is translated into …에 관하여 which is rarely used in Korean websites and is taken as a ‘literal’ translation. The common term for web contents should be 소개 in this case.