cisco 시스코 awkward wordings

source: http://www.cisco.com/cisco/web/solutions/small_business/index.html target: http://www.cisco.com/web/KR/networking/smbiz/products/index.html 원하는 비즈니스 방향으로 시행착오 없이 정확하게 나아갈 수 있도록 시스코가 도와드리겠습니다. Awkward: 비즈니스 방향으로 (following its business plan). 방향 (directional noun) doesn’t get along with the preceding noun “business” in context due to the mixed form with English and Korean. 비즈니스 플랜 (business plan) would be more natural. The subject in …

Linkedin.com 링크드인 awkward wordings

source: http://www.linkedin.com/home?trk=hb_tab_home_top target: http://www.linkedin.com/nhome/?trk=hb_tab_home_top&_l=ko_KR                 The alien term 비즈니스인 really bothers me. “share your knowledge and help your network”: Awkward passive verb form in target 특별 소개되세요 which literally means “be introduced specially.” The sentence 전문가가 되어… 되세요 is completely broken.               …

Apple 애플 awkward wordings

Apple Korean pageMeaningless redundant repeat in image text due to the literal delivery: target: iPhone 이래 가장 획기적인 iPhone (The most innovative iPhone since iPhone) Does “every inch” imply “모든 면에서 (in all aspects)? 오므리다 and 쓸어넘기다 need to be sanitized with better terms instead of meaningless awkward functional verbs in context.

Linkedin 링크드인 awkward wording

source: http://linkedin.com target: http://www.linkedin.com/nhome/?_l=ko_KR There is a space error, …일 간. A basic grammar is dealt uncautiously. Literal/Awkward wording. You have shown up in search results 11 times in teh past 30 days. 다른 사람들의 (to other users) is an unnecessary addition since my profile is shown to others anyways when users search. 검색 결과에 …

Crema 크레마 iOS/Android broken grammar

Crema 크레마 iOS/Android app (ebook app) 때 (at the time of) doesn’t fit into the context since the time adverb is usually used in speech. It should be replaced with 도서 다운로드 및 스크랩 리스트 동기화 시 요금이 과다 청구될 수 있습니다. First off, the warning sentence is not appropriate in terms of meeting the …