source: http://www.apple.com/ipad/ target: http://www.apple.com/kr/ipad/ “for everyone on your list” is nicely rephrased with “for those who I would like to thank and show my love” However, “전하다(show/deliver)” is unnecessarily repeated and makes the flowing unnatural. The second sentence tone doesn’t get along with the preceding sentence due to the verb tone transition. 무료로 배송해 드립니다 …

source: http://www.apple.com/ipad/ target: http://www.apple.com/kr/ipad/ The footer title “about” is translated into …에 관하여 which is rarely used in Korean websites and is taken as a ‘literal’ translation. The common term for web contents should be 소개 in this case.